I totally agree too!I bet he'd be so moved!!Have u ever thought about publishing them??U're really amazing and I think u can give smt really precious with ur words to whte world^^I'm meaning it!!
^^ nah never thought of publishing them or sending them to Jae Hee himself lol, but since lualm suggested it, I might give it a try hehehee
You gals are all complimenting my writing skills, but honestly, I suck at interpreting poems, and I haven't been getting a lot of responses of my fanfiction (which is related to My Girl)...that's a fact lol.
I plan to write a Lee Mong Ryong and Han Chae Young fan fiction if I feel good about my other fan fiction hehehehe ^_^
[Intro]
Lalala lalala la la lala la Ohhh
You know I never felt like this before
Lalala lalala la la lala la Ohhh
Feels like something real
[Verse 1]
I'm obessive when just one thought of you comes up
I'm agressive just one thought of closing up
You got me stressing, incessantly pressing the issue
Da very moment gone you know I miss you
I'm the question an you of course the answer
Just hold me close boy cause I'm your tiny dancer
You make me shaken up, heads are mistaken
But I can't control myself got me calling out for help
[Chorus (2x)]
S.O.S. please someone help me. Its not healthy for me to feel this
Y.O.U. are making this hard, I can't take it see it don't feel right
[Bridge]
This time please someone come and rescue me
Cause you or my mind got me losing it
I'm lost you got me lookin for the rest of me (just testing me) but still I'm losing it
This time please someone come and rescue me cause you or my mind got me losing it
I'm lost you got me looking for the rest of me, got the best of me, so now I'm losing it
[Verse 2]
Just your presence and I second guess my insanity
Yes its a lesson and its based on my vanity
My tummy's up in knots sone as I see you I get so hot
Common sense if out the door can't seem to find a lot
Take me (uh huh) you know inside you feel it right
Take me I'ma put desire in your arms tonight
I'm out with you, ya got me head over heels
Boy you got me hanging on by the way you make me feel
[Chorus (1x)]
[Bridge]
Boy you know you got me feeling open
And boy your loves enough with words unspoken
I said boy I'm feeling you, you got me open
I don't know what to do its true
I'm going crazy over you I'm begging
Wow!!! Polabola!!! Such great poems!!! I like them!!! weeh... I'm not good in writing poems (especially in English) but I write too... It's just when my disease attacks again... (this is the time when many ideas come and go on my mind and i need to write them down...hahha.... )
sassyging: just post here and share your thoughts, I think magaling kanaman eh
I'm feeling too poetic today lol since I've seen 3 Iron
Invisible
by Polabola (inspired by 3 Iron)
One day I ran into myself
seen a man who I never knew
I look into each of his features
A totally different creature
[chorus]
I don't know where's my place
I don't know where I lie
I'm just invisible in everyone's eyes
I'm just nobody
watching over
Until somobody saw me
A wandered alone in the streets
Looking for shelter and a place
Eating whatever in such haste
Still homeless, hopeless and highly disgraced
When I feel somone's loving face
I ran to comfort and praise her
I'm still not seen nor softly yeard
I confine to myself and to her word
^-^ weeh... polabola... i just love the poem... (INVISIBLE)... so great...!!! the first stanza really struck me... weeh... i suddenly remember the 3-iron scenes...
hmmm... last night while i cant sleep, i suddenly remember jh's eyes...and my disease start to attack again... hehe...
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Kakaibang Nilalang
Isang nilalang ang isinilang sa kanyang mga mata...
Isang nilalang na di na nawala sa kanya...
At hanggang ngayon, ako pa ri'y nagtataka...
Ano kaya itong nilalang sa kanyang mga mata?
Akala ko noong una'y isa itong leon...
Na tila mangangain kapag nagalit yaon...
Ngunit biglang nagulat nang siya'y tumawa...
Tila isang anghel ang aking nakita...
Ilang sandali lamang ako'y naluha...
Tila naging isang batang 'di matigil sa pag-uha...
Matapos ang ilang saglit, nakaramdam na ako ng takot...
Nakikita ko sa mga mata niya'y nangangatog na tuhod...
Hanggang ngayon tuloy ay nag-iisip...
Ni hindi man lamang ako makaidlip...
Ano kayang uri ng nilalang ang naroon?
Ano kaya talaga iyon?
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(translations... Just bear with me... I'm not good with it...)
Unknown Creature
An unknown creature was born in his eyes...
An unknown creature who never leaves his side...
Until now I'm still very curious...
What could that creature be in his eyes?
I once thought it was a lion...
That's ready to fight when it gets mad...
But I was surprised when i see him laugh...
An angel seems to appear in his eyes...
But after a while, tears fall from my eyes...
It seems that I saw a child who never stops to cry...
But after a while I become scared...
When I saw in it, some knees shaking so hard...
Until now, I'm still thinking...
And I still can't sleep...
What kind of creature lives in there?
What kind of creature could that be?
^^ nicely done sassyging!!! I love the mystery with of your poem. It seems like the persona is curious and drawn to the creature (Jae Hee). I love it ^_^
hey sassyging...you also have a talent in writing...pls do share more of your works just like polabola...the poem is laced with mystery in each stanza...
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but it's really beautiful!
thanks for the comment. I enjoy constructive criticisms...
